What is technology? You all might think that technology, though is greatly beneficial for the modern world, is a great nuisance and a distraction from keeping us to move forward. But the truth is, technology would bring great help to your life, and would ease your work on certain tasks. Over the past 50 years, technology has developed in a more faster rate than ever. Its hard to believe that 15 years ago, a cellphone would only server a simple task of calling and texting another person. Now, you could do your laundry with a button on your phone, or order food miles away and have it delivered to you at your doorstep. Generally, most of you would still think of it as a distraction the younger generations use or as anuisance. But in truth you should try to see it more as a tool. Now, more and more jobs are requiring the need of phones, tablets and computers, so generally, you must be able to adapt to the conditions of the present world in order to stay where you are.
Although the internet may bring you into a world of excitement. It may also come with a risk. People tend to be more lazy when they are connected with the internet and the priviliges of the internet and technology may be a huge economic burden for some people. More importantly, technology and social media are very addicting. The addictiveness of social media has led to the development of new mental disorders. It also has been proven to cause depression and may even lead to suicide. Parents who are addicted to it may neglect their children more, and in general, social media can cause you to feel more ignorant, disconnected and can create a big gap between you and your loved ones. These problems are caused due to the excessive use of social media and technology. Although technology allows you to do things easier and allows you to connect more, an over-usage of these tools can cause devastating problems. Therefore, it is important that you control yourself and restrain yourself from abusing the blessings we have made for ourselves.
Technology can bring many benefits and ease to your life, it makes our works and life easier. Phones, tablets, computers can save time in doing those work. Besides for work, you can find recreational value in the technology we have today. We have apps like spotify, netflix or youtube, where you can listen and enjoy the music you love, watch movies in the comfort of your own home, or watch a youtube video on the things you love. With the internet you can find information faster and easier, allowing you to work more efficiently and more faster. You can also communicate easier with cellphones or the applications, with apps like Line, Whatsapp, Facebook, Instagram, and many more. With these apps you can also keep up with your friends and family to know whats happening in their lives as well. Besides keeping up with family and friends, you can keep up with the news around the world, letting you know whats happening around the world. The internet allows you to connect and interact with more people around the world, with this, you can have a better understanding of people with defferent culutres and lifestyle. Among other things, the internet can mae you find tickets for travelling, find good restaurants around you easier. You can also learn new languages with help from the internet. There are many things the internet and technology can give to you, and these examples are only the tip of the iceberg, and since technology isn’t that hard to acquire these days, why not start trying and exploring the vast and exciting world of the internet?, better late than never.
Wulan 11D 
I love how you present all of that in an essay. You have achieved the goals to inform, persuade and influence people to be not afraid of technology. I also like the style of language you chose because you’re not using mainstream words and giving a very detailed information in each paragraphs. I’m also pretty amazed I learned a lot from your essay because there are some stuff I don’t know about before. It’s really mind-blowing to know it was 15 years ago that a cellphone would only be able to receive calls and messages, but now smartphone exists that can help us in almost everything. Overall, your essay is excellent! Well done!
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Hey, Wul! Your “Nothing to Fear” argumentative writing talking about technology that elderly people should not fear is totally amazing! Your purpose can be seen clearly. It’s to persuade them, the elderly people. In order to persuade, you gave information about technology. The reasons and evidence of why they should not fear technology are stated in your writing. You also mentioned the risk of using technology, such as addiction and that it can create a big gap between the users with their loved ones. By mentioning those risks, it helps you ensure that they are aware of it before they explore deeper into the technology. Overall, it’s fantastic! I can’t wait to read more of your writings on this blog!
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Great work! Your essay is written in a descriptive, informative and persuasive way, so I am sure it matches with the purpose of your text which is to describe, inform and most importantly to persuade. You write up a nice balance of advantages and disadvantages of technology, by using the advantages to persuade them but also keep them aware of the disadvantages it may bring. With your choice of words, you set out a nice tone to your writing as I could feel the enthusiasm of using technology especially on your last paragraph. If I were an elderly, I would immediately ask my son or daughter to buy me a smartphone after I read this essay. Overall, I enjoyed reading your essay. Keep up with your work!
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Hi there, Wulan! It’s me again, back on reading your interesting blog posts. This article is helpful for them. It can persuade them to use more technology. Besides, what elders commonly do on their daily life is almost nothing! Technology will help them do stuffs at home. If I place myself as an elder, I would ask my kids to teach me how to use them. So I bet your article will help us as elders to gain knowledge for the technology they and able to use. You also made technology sound very easy! And as from now I believe they really are easy! Bottom line, all I can say is great job once again and congratulations on your hard work! Bye for now, can’t wait to see you post again!
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A nice piece of article, though you might want to change either the font color, or the background’s, because it kind of hurts because contrast. Don’t get me wrong, it works, i can read it perfectly, it just doesn’t feel right. Anyways, good stuff, but you can make a few improvements.Maybe do things like adding separation lines. Yes, of course, you did put them in different paragraphs, good job! But it still looks like as if it’s all a clumped up bunch of words, and not separate. Putting separation lines (Blank lines in between paragraphs) will solve this problem easily.
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Hi Wulan! it’s me, Nanda . I am impressed with your article. I find your article very informative, descriptive, and persuasive because you complete the structure very well because this article includes advantages, disadvantages, and conclusions. I like how you compare the advantages and disadvantages. This means that your goals are not only persuading, but also to inform your readers about technology. You also succeed in reaching out to the audience not to be afraid of technology because you add some facts in this article to make it easier to understand. I think you have achieved the main goals and objectives of this article. You also use a more formal tone but I’m amazed that you can also make it seem more flexible to read. You can add more about your opinion. I’m totally agree that technology makes our life easier! You make it perfect. I like it, good job!
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great article. Reading it I felt like I could relate to it, which is very nice, being relatable, that is. You’ve definitely improved in your writing. I guess all those classes paid off. NEVER underestimate any subject being presented to you. As you’ve been through it, it’s important to learn that no one in this world knows everything, so keep an open mind and keep on learning. Keep up the good work, good luck on your studies!
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What an amazing and great article! you telling the things that are really actual and factual, also i really like the introduction part of your article. You’re not just telling the things that connected to the advantages and disadvantages of the technology but also how the technology was created and that’s really informative.I’ve seen your advantages and disadvantages part of using technology in this article, all of the things that you’re adding also realistic. Knowing that this article is aimed especially for people age 50 years and above this article is really suitable for people with that group of age. One of the great thing about this article is that you telling the latest facts about the topic that you’ve been discussed, about technology specifically.Thank you very much for your informative article and have a nice day.
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